Love...

by Thegreatsock

Published January 16, 2015

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In Poetry

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    Love is hate, at least to me. 

         A little late, so sorry.

 Nothing can stop this feeling inside.

    Accelerate and leave me behind.

   So perfect and so out of reach.

     Oblivious to all my speech.

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Booshian
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Booshian wrote a review Review · Jan 18, 2015

Hello! thought I'd pop in for a little review :)
I quite liked this poem, Like high school itself it was short and sweet. As the others said I agree it is a little short. I don't have much to reflect on in the review as it was quite short there wasnt really room for mistake. I did like what you wrote though, You're clearly quite good at forming a strong rhyming scheme.
Good job and keep writing!
~Booshian

TheSilentBagpipe wrote a review Review · Jan 16, 2015

Hello there! CelticThunder1438 here to review your work! a.k.a Selina

First of I would like to say, that I really liked this poem. It was quite good. I never really wrote poetry until the last couple months to a year but now I'm getting into it and am starting to enjoy it! It is always nice to read someone else's poetry also!

#1 I loved your rhyming it was really good.
#2 You described love so perfectly.
#3 I am defiantly looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Seeya later!

~ CelticThunder1438

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Spaulds
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Spaulds commented Comment · Jan 16, 2015

The way you rhyme your words is fantastic! The construction of the poem is nice too, however it is a little short. You should definatly continue this poem! I didnt see any errors in grammar or spelling so over all great job! (Sorry tried to keep my review short.) :)

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Lenora742
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Lenora742 wrote a review Review · Jan 16, 2015

Hello there, Here to review your poem :)

Overall, I like it. I didn't notice any grammar/spelling errors, so great job! It was a little short, but you got your point across. "Love is hate, at least to me." as much as I agree, I feel like this line is a little cliche. The flow in the poem is a little rough to me. It doesn't seem to flow smoothly, and I think that has to do with your wording. Though this is just my opinion, other may feel differently.

Like I said, I like it. It's short, and simple, but you get your point across in the form of a rhyme. :)

Keep Writing,

~Nora



Owning our story can be hard but not nearly as difficult as spending our lives running from it. Embracing our vulnerabilities is risky but not nearly as dangerous as giving up on love and belonging and joy—the experiences that make us the most vulnerable. Only when we are brave enough to explore the darkness will we discover the infinite power of our light.
— Brené Brown