Published December 3, 2009
People, sorry that it's boring, I'll rewrite it. Wait.
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Ah yes, Spiral strikes again.
Hmm, lets see, where to begin...
So this is interesting, as usual, but it is a bit...bland...seems like it was one of those things you just had to write and get it over with, but it could be a bit better. the whole thing is a bit of an info dump. Sure, details great, but too many make it boreding, which is something I myself, have to work on.
Over all though, I am excited for the next peice, this story interests me.
Keep Writing!
~Shaard.
P.S. I would recommend posting the whole next chapter at once, instead of breaking it up. It's rather annoying having to wait.