The Midnight Sky

by alilovessandy

Published September 3, 2013

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The midnight sky calls to me

I can feel the wind whispering my name

My bones are stiff with change.

The full moon sits in the midnight sky

Unaware of the pain it brings.

I let out a cry.

My spine jolts and twists into something new.

I’m running through the midnight woods.

Branches whipping my hide.

The wind crawls through my fur,

And the fog slithers around my feet.

I run till I find her.

My love in the midnight sky.

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DarkRavenGrimm
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DarkRavenGrimm commented Comment · Oct 25, 2013

This is an excellent poem and i love it. This shows the basic emotion that all humans have and show that we all want to find that special someone. I love this poem because this is how i feel about the idea of trying to find that special someone. Please keep on writing this is a great poem.

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sarahnsnow
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sarahnsnow wrote a review Review · Sep 4, 2013

This was a really good poem!!!! You had some good imagery!! I love how you said

"I’m running through the midnight woods.

Branches whipping my hide.

The wind crawls through my fur,

And the fog slithers around my feet.

I run till I find her.

My love in the midnight sky."

I especially liked the ending sentences; "I run till I find her. My love in the midnight sky." I'm guessing it's the moon? And I'm assuming you are writing about a wolf or something because towards the end that's what it was sounding like. Anyway I loved the detail and it was amazing!

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Vivian
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Vivian wrote a review Review · Sep 3, 2013

Awww. It's so sweet. :)

Hey Ali, Viv here. Nice poem, I kind of clicked on it because of the title. It sounds mysterious and romantic and that's it's allure.

The wording of the poem sounds like your telling a story between the lines about lost love and a journey to find it again. Oh and it's very detailed so it makes a clear picture in your mind.

Well by, 'bout to read "Not What You Expected". ;D

thankyou so much

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RoseCrown
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RoseCrown wrote a review Review · Sep 3, 2013

It was an amazing poem Firstly!
Secondly, I love the title!
And to me I felt like I was in the poem like I was running in the woods and I could feel the wind!
Only a few poets can do that make you feel what they write.
I love the language you used and it is just an suggestion if you wrote this poem in a rhyming scheme it would have been better but it's according to you and I loved it.

Write a lot more! :P :D
LOIS

thxs so much. i didnt rhyme it because i hate and i mean hate rhyming poetry. but thxs for the insite

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StealTheWorld commented Comment · Sep 3, 2013

alilovessandy,

I really love the emotion in this. Your voice gives me this vivid image and it's just beautiful. I can picture everything you described quite well, so congratulations. I'm assuming this is a werewolf type of thing? Or some other creature?

Either way, it's fantastic.

-Dark

thxs. it is a werewolf

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Shadowwriter1
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Shadowwriter1 wrote a review Review · Sep 3, 2013

Okay, first, this was really good. There was excellent imagry and emotion, and the entire thing flowed really well. There were a few gramatical errors but apart from that it was well written and laid out.
I must enquire, however, is this about a warewolf looking for the one they love? That is what I waas gathering from the entire thing. Apart from that, well done and keep writiting!

yes it is. can you fix the spelling and gramma tomorrow for me and u know i will always write.

Well, there is the chance you could completely loose your mind and turn into your brighter, slutty opposite.

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AnnaFantasy wrote a review Review · Sep 3, 2013

This is really great! I love anything to do with werewolves ;). You have great imagery with "slither" and "crawls", and I really like the like "My spine twists into something new." I feel like you could lose one 'midnight', it's repeated a lot the length of what it is. Keep up the good work! I know I could never write something short so clearly :)

thxs so much for the review. i will work at fixing that



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