The complexities of human discovery are filled by the term of scientific research. Methods and properties of mathematical equations used to fill a wandering question of the why of the cause. Technologies used to look much deeper into the smaller units of what we don’t understand as sapiens. Study of our outside world that owes us no explanation of its existence and most definitely has no reason for existing. It is just there, correlation of one’s existence does not equal causation of the incomprehensible and as time goes on scientists answer increasingly to a young wanderer's questions. Our natural curiosity expands our questions into theories into laws that are used to teach and let others understand that weren’t ever known in prior generations.
The small to the big explained by human construct of language and communication, being filled in books, articles, scientific papers, and entries. To up front communication, pictures and diagrams and overall senses excluding taste. Vast vocabulary words that we use commonly to write and comprehend sentences that form concepts that are only special to our overall understanding. As languages arise, they die of the reality of time, being a communication to remember. There are other languages that are still used today, such as Spanish, French and German as examples. Different cultures and communities informed with tradition, culture, practices and religion are a strong example of the components of social factors. History alters our current understanding of diverse worlds and communal aspects. Events, figures, and impactful occurrences such as types of government, currency and much more structuring the statement of politics. What has been done and the knowledge to know why they should not be repeated. Early when things were not much discovered or concluded agriculture was a big source of food supply, as the Earth’s soil compacted a space for growth. Tectonic plates, mountains, streams, rocks and minerals were a common learnt thing among the human population in the school system. Grasping the physical touch of geology and geography, what naturally composed our platform that homo sapiens and former human adjacent species have walked on. So as human experiences have progressed, many things go on to change and alter and improve.
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Hia! I finally have a bit more time and decided to read some of my bookmarks and yours is the first that came up :3
here's a more generic writing tip: passive voice has its time and place but you might want to avoid it right at the start of your story.I'm not sure why you label this as a short story, it feels more like an essay. It is also very wordy as if you tried to find the most complex words imaginable to convey your ideas.
You already have "to fill" in your previous sentence, so having that followed right up with same verb feels very repetitive. You try to use different words throughout the piece so finding a different word here might be a good idea.
I'm not sure what does means exactly and it's also a little cumbersome to read. Are you talking about the fact that scientists try to use language more suitable to younger people, to draw the masses in to their discoveries? I feel like the wording could be tweaked here to be more specific and also to be less prone to make ppl like me stumble. I feel like the increasingly here might be the culprit :3
I really like the phrase being a communication to remember! That's very poetic ~
Which makes the next sentence feel very out of place where you go into a specifics. Do you really need to list up all the languages like this? Especially since we know that most of these languages are basically unrecognizable from their origins so it doesn't really support your point?
Overall a very interesting glimpse into your thought processes and I had a great time reading this :)
Thank you for your feedback, there is seemingly a very specific pattern I need to work on with my writing skills. I appreciate your input, thanks!
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Based on my impression, in overall, your work sounds to be something like an introduction for a sci-fi work, which is fantastic! but it might be not, and its totally okay. The more I read, the more it sounds to be something like, an essay, perhaps?
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
I think it depends on the target audience. But for me personally, I'd prefer to have a room where the reader stop, think, or read a sentence or paragraph once more. Sometimes there are a reader or a type of writing that make a reader keep reading, but the reader didn't realize what they read. As if like suddenly they finished few paragraphs, then asked themself, what did I read?
Your writing is unique for me, in a way, it's not first person. But to be said as third person, I don't see any subject in the whole explanation. It's as if someone try to explain things.
I was stopped at this point,
but then went into the deep of mindless thought again when reading the next sentences.
Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I like the introduction actually,
It sounds like going to unveil something big, or asking a philosophical question.
And this one.
It makes me stop a bit, re-read the previous sentences, and nod, like, oh yeah, these are the kind of "most used language" other than English. Which is refreshing to see these name.
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
As I said previously, this is a personal impression without any professional capacity. Where do we want to lead the reader? How do we make sure that reader still stay on our us? One can read, but not fully immerse in our writing.
With this same content, you can try using different approach. Then see how the reader read each approach. You can always keep your own approach as your own material. But then the way to deliver it to people can be in various ways.
I am looking forward to read your next publication!
From what I can understand, are you asking how I can essentially properly hook a reader in, or make the writing flow without sounding overly confusing? If so, I see what you mean. I'll consider this while working on my skill.
heyo! kiki here for their daily review!
Hmm I don't usually review this kind of thing, so this is a trial and error sort of thing for me hehe.
To start off, I think this may be a little more comprehensive if there were a few more paragraph breaks? But this also may just be my pea brain being used to poems lol.
I feel like this line was a little unclear, or a little messy. It's kind of hard to make out what is being said here, so I feel it would help the reader if it was cleaned up a little bit. This whole thing gives off an essay vibe, which to be honest I enjoyed quite a bit. I think this was really good,
keep it up!!
~ Yuuki the dinosoor
Apologies for not replying sooner, thank you for your feedback and I'll definitely consider my word usage here. Thank you again
:)