Published February 28, 2005
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I thought this poem made some really good points. You had a to-die-for beginning and end, but you kind of ramble at some points. The second stanza is a good example of this. At first, when I read it I went 'what?!' but then after a couple goings over I got it. I think it might just be my age (lol) but you kind of jump around there. First, you're saying that this person is just a kid, sheltered from evil. Then you say he's dead....??? That's just what I thought was confusing.
Over all, however, I thought this was a really good poem. As with all your works...haha. (i'm serious though)