Sorry please ignore this ...

by farz95

Published May 25, 2012

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I am very very very sorry ....please ignore this , i was not suppose to post this here !

Sorry

Farz !

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noninjaes
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noninjaes wrote a review Review · May 25, 2012

This review of the above apology is solely for my amusement and the amusement of anyone who happens to stumble across this.

This poem is just horrible. Thee lines, no structure, and absolutely no poetic feel at all. This poem is totally due for a rewrite. The first stanza is too long and too short - the line is too long, and there aren't enough lines. There is no structure, and no poetic feel at all. What you need to do is click edit work and hold down the backspace button till your finger is sore.

This is how I'd rewrite it:

I am very very very sorry ....please ignore this , i was not suppose to post this here ! So sorry I am
Ignore, you must.
This piece is wrong,
and placed unwise.


Sorry I say
to have wasted your time.

Farz is unhappy
to have been an inconveniance.


I really hope this review helps [bring amusement].

- noni >( ==)



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