The Thought Before the Thought

I came here to write a thought and somehow ended up questioning who had the thought
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hey hira!!♡ I just read ur beautiful work and WHY are u making me question my own brainn....

i really like the idea of this, we always assume that we have control over our thoughts, but what if our own brain has already been thinking before we even tell ourselves what to think? as in are we creating our thoughts, or do we just observe the thoughts that have already appeared in our head? i think that's a really interesting point to make

My favorite part was the questioning of where the "I" begins, it's such a simple question but the more you think about it the less you know where to start answering it

i mean, if we are the ones observing the thoughts in our brain, who exactly is doing the thinking? i really like how u didn't add a conclusion to this at all, as there really isn't one. just a question that sticks with you long after u've finished reading. definitely an intriguing topic hira!! <3

~lilly♡ the fire dragon

hey hey Hira!!! i'm trying to get my third review star today, and I was hoping to review one of your works!

9 lines of poem, but I quite enjoyed it. well, I tend to enjoy most of your works. the less lines, the less reading, the less to review am I right?/j

I feel like this poem sparks a lot of thinking for the reader to do. Since it's not very long it gives space for the reader to imagine many things, and to interpret this in their own way.

I think this was amazing!

~yuuki the dinosoor

Hi Hira.

I like the idea behind this poem. I am fascinated by the self, by performance, identity, and how our bodies and minds are separate and yet one, so I was excited to read this. It's a clear, concise, straightforward poem, and I think it has a good rhythm. However, the main fault here is that you are just explaining this idea rather than enacting it. It's a very familiar, if not overdone, philosophical thought, so grounding it in something more concrete would really help set it apart. Using one specific moment, such as catching yourself mid-gesture or mid-sentence and then overanalysing who made that decision, would carry the argument that the abstractions currently only state to the reader. Like, when you say 'Maybe there are thoughts in us / that begin before we become aware of them' are you thinking about the Freudian idea of our conscious mind and unconscious mind, of the id, ego and superego? That we have repressed states within us? Or are you saying that there is literally another person inside of us, maybe like someone with DID? Or just that perhaps our entire lives and personalities are built up from genetics, our upbringing, parents, where we lived, the money we had access too, and so we are just an amalgamation of things and every decision is made for us because the decisions we make are based on all those factors? I think if you gave your poem something a little more concrete, maybe reading into Freud, Lacan, Kristeva, especially Libet's readiness-potential experiments and Daniel Wegner's The Illusion of Conscious Will, you could really explore these feelings.

Anyway, sorry, I didn't mean to go into a huge philosophical ramble. I think it's a great idea and what you have is solid, but it needs that extra something to really stand out! Keep writing <3