I honestly am CONFUSED :(

by jolene15

Published April 12, 2012

E - Everyone

In Poems

Okay do I really care after you hurt my feelings more then onces,

Do I really love you still when you don't care about how I feel,

Am I going crazy for saying I still have feelings for you,

and I know for sure that I have No clue on what's going on,

Am I crazy for feeling like I want to cry when I see you,

or how about dying inside every time I hear your name,

Just promise me one thing and one thing only,

that you wont hurt this girl your with now like you did me.

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Loller65
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Loller65 wrote a review Review · Apr 12, 2012

Where to start? Grammar, grammar, grammar!

The mistakes vary and are all over the place. You space out what should be one word (inside) and make a single word out of two (everytime should be every time). "Onces" isn't a word, by the way.

You need to work on your apostrophe use. I see "Dont" in lieu of "Don't" and "sayin" where either "saying" or "sayin'" should be.

Throughout the poem, the rhythm feels off, like this is a letter you tried to turn into a poem. It's too short, as well.

I would suggest more rigorous proof reading from now on.

Its suppose to be a little off that's the way I want it to be there's reasons be hide it. Oh and Yes it's suppose to look like a letter that's the way I write and also poems are all different lengths but thanks anyways.



When we are children we seldom think of the future. This innocence leaves us free to enjoy ourselves as few adults can. The day we fret about the future is the day we leave our childhood behind.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind