Loneliness

by ladymay

Published September 28, 2011

Loneliness is the caw of a single crow
The rustle of leaves
The cobwebs in the corner
And if you listen, all you hear is the wind
And the happiness falls from you,
Like rain from a cloud.

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smilelikeyoumeanit wrote a review Review · Sep 28, 2011

I love this poem. It sums everything about being lonely :) and is really genuine. I think if expanded on it a little it would be amazing :D

creativityrules wrote a review Review · Sep 28, 2011

Hello there!!!

I really like this poem. It's definitely short, but somehow I think that that works with the topic. What you wrote is concise and clear but still paints a picture in my mind. I'm familiar with loneliness and I think that this piece describes it very effectively.

There's not really much for me to criticize here just because of how short the poem is. I noticed that the capitalization and punctuation of this poem is a little off, but it would only take a minute or so to resolve that issue.

I don't really have anything negative to say about this poem. I think you did an awesome job!!!

Great work!!

Keep writing! :)

-Rose

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LindsayG commented Comment · Sep 28, 2011

I like this....but why didn't you continue????



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