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by running_with_the_devil

Published April 6, 2010

This is kind of a slam poetry hip hop poem. It has a flow similar to that of a Sage Francis or Atmosphere song. This is for you, big brother.


I remember.
I remember when you were smoking weed in between every class as a teen.
You were what I am.
Running free and playing with fire, dropping acid and being a liar.
You were a kid, I was a child.
Our intentions were exotic, our actions were wild.
We used to rock Nirvana and smoke marijuana, just cruising around.
I miss cruising around.
The days of youth happened chapters ago, and now you’re on to the sequel.
Adulthood, no good. Do you enjoy doing as you should?
Take a look at who ruined this planet.
It wasn’t the kids, it wasn’t our youth.
It was mom and dad and a political group.
Growing up means catching up with what you used to hate.
Don’t trade who you are for a perfect house and a perfect car.
You are not who created you.
What’s next? Will you get on your knees and pray?
Will you become what you despised yesterday?
I can only hope for this phase of responsibility to pass.
Be the brother you used to be.
If you take another hit of reality, don’t bother passing it to me.
I don’t smoke.

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whatevr
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whatevr wrote a review Review · Apr 8, 2010

Hey there. The only thing about this that bugs me is the size of each line. They grow really large, then become les than five words. But I love this piece, it shows real creativity and it is inspiring. Just work on your sentence structure and it will be absolutely PERFECT.

Biffle

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Smexaykk01
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Smexaykk01 wrote a review Review · Apr 8, 2010

:lol:

I like it!

Very fun and artistic!
You're very good at this!
I give you:
:elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant:

:elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant:

10/10 for Awesome-ness, creatvity!
, life-ness and expression!


Good for you!

Keep writing!

Smexx



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