A smile is a funny thing.
It almost never tells the truth.
In between the teeth
and the lips
is a mask.
Below my nose
is a lie.
My cheeks crease by my dimples
where each line is painted meticulously.
Temporary wrinkles
that show who I am.
Who I am supposed to be.
My teeth answer questions that are asked.
No one doubts a smile.
I’ve perfected the art
of looking like someone
who has nothing to cry about.
I clean my canvas every night,
my tears wiping every line away.
I’ll paint it again tomorrow.
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
I think this poem is about someone who hides their sadness behind a smile. Everyone sees them smiling and assumes they're happy, but nobody realizes that their smile is like a mask.
Every day, they paint that smile on their face again, pretending everything is fine. But at night, when they're alone, they cry, and their tears wash away the smile they carefully created.i know how this feels coz am one of them.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
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Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I like this whole poem. I always love to write and read this kinda poems about smile hiding pain like they are best friend oh! Wait- i am going write one poem about this smile and pain friendship. Ok ok my fav line is
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall it has that painful, heavy, good vibe. Its easy to read and understand. Keepp writingg!!! Thank you for sharing this. Yay~
You making me cry dude ok i will review this
I really liked this. I feel like I related to it in ways I wish I did not. The imagery of it was really good. Comparing the smile to a painting was beautiful and a great choice. I feel like a lot of people understand that feeling, especially the way you described it. The last stanza where you talk about crying at night feels a little too relatable. This felt like a really good piece of self expression and I easily see it as a piece of writing that a lot of other people would be able to relate to - myself included. I love reading writing with such simple but great details that you can just tell were thought about while writing. It just adds a lot to the writing and I feel like it works really well here in the sense that it gives the writing that little bit of an extra edge. The idea of the poem is just such a simple idea that you worked really well, still adding enough detail to a simpler concept and giving it a lot of depth to give it more life. I would definitely read more like this. This was a very enjoyable and good read. It was simple to understand but the idea was too hidden or spoon fed to me. Instead, it was a nice in between where the imagery and small details really highlighted some of the stand out moments I really liked. I really enjoyed reading this and would definitely read more of your writing!
With the first stanza, talking about how the smile doesn't tell the truth is very interesting considering this refers to smiles as art. Art cannot necessarily lie but it can be interpreted differently by different people, and tithe speakers perspective that is holding themselves together. The second part really digs more into the art piece, especially the wrinkles. Smile lines, frown lines, it all tells who you are. Also, to afterwards talk of people not doubting a smile, it goes back to art because art is not believed or not believed, but interpreted. Overall I love this poem!