Published September 28, 2010
Sort of a random poem I wrote kind of recently. Feel free to rip it to shreds if you wish to, but I'd really appreciate some tips on how to improve. I hope you like it. 
Bubbling, bubbling,
A white sea of foam.
Happily, happily,
through it my child roams.
Oh, how careless these days
When a bathtub of bubbles
Was an intricate maze.
Smiling, giggling,
Everything is fun.
But sore arms, back ache,
When I clean the bubble scum.
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words I would take out
Hope I helped,
A. S.