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Note: manga reads right to left :)
The guy looks like a character from a manga I read
I DEMAND MORE
ITS ON MY WALL IM SLOW ALR
Hello!
I haven't yet review this kind of thing yet so I decided to drop by and try! If my review is horrible please ignore it and try not to get too offended, I haven't had any practise so...
The first 'square' - I don't know how to call it - the person I suppose to be the main character is sitting on a pouch, relaxed, eating something, probably a snack. Strong, typical start I think, that goes well with the drama on the later squares!
The second square: "Hey, Vince? That one boy is here!" The quite nutral and relatively empty background brings all of the information to the speech bubble, so the reader can concentrate fully on the text, which is the important part, while still having some basic information on the character's environment: good job!
The middle square: "WHAT?" Capital letters, surprised and horrified face: good show of emotion.
The next square amplifies that emotion through the main character's verbal reaction, and then the face of who I assume to be "That one boy" shows what/who we're dealing with. Good job there too! Hope to be able to read the rest soon!
Have a wonderful day
- HMMHhehe the potato
okay im sorry but i giggled at this review ToT i will say thank you and also they're not called squares (thats what i laughed at) they're panels lol
Aaaaaah ok thank you! I really don't know anything about mangas but I do enjoy reading them ^^
^^ thankyou for the review
No problem! I also went and checked out the next part on your wall =D it is very good!
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I enjoyed this page. Although it consists of only one section and doesn't provide much information about the larger story, it efficiently establishes character through visual comedy. Vince comes through as very expressive, particularly through their shocked expression and the elongated profanity. "That one boy" conveys a lot of characterization without him saying a word. His cool expression, hairstyle, and jewelry give him a distinct aesthetic.
Visually, I appreciate how the panels gradually become more exaggerated as Vince's reaction escalates. The prominent "WHAT?" and the isolated curse make the final panic apparent. Since this is a rough draft, some elements may change once the page is cleaned up, but the expressions and comedic timing are already very readable. Even without much context, I can tell that Vince is likely to be an entertaining character to follow.
Thank you for this preview.
i am posting it on my wall if you're interested in more :) and thank you