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Re: Crawlers - Chapter Three: The Farm
Thank you so much for the review! And you know what, you're so right that the next chapter needs to be action-based. I wrote this last year and I've just ...
Jul 28 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Three: The Farm
Thank you so much for the review! I always love your observations. I always imagined Rev probably was eavesdropping, and that he also is what my dad calls a 'wind-up ...
Jul 28 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Two: The Hospital
thank you so much for the review. I think you're totally right that a lot of it feels rushed. This was submitted as part of my Master's course, and we ...
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Two: The Hospital
Thanks for catching that tense slip. 'She had to be in a hospital' would definitely work better. I think when I wrote it, 'she must be in the hospital' was ...
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm
thank you so much! I'll be looking forward to your thoughts whenever you get the time!
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Two: The Hospital
I'm actually thinking that this might work better as chapter one instead of the farm chapter?? let me know your thoughts!
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm
thanks so much! All your feedback is so valuable to me. I really think you're right that some of the exposition and dialogue need to be better worded. I think ...
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm
many thanks for your review! I think you're right about the many characters introduced at once. Do you think it might have been better if say one of those characters ...
Jul 27 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm
oops i realised it didn't keep my formatting of indenting new lines and speech, oh well XD
Jul 26 -
Re: Um, Like, Yeah?
thank you so much for your kind review! I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
Mar 11, 2025 -
Re: when i ate the mold - IV (or, the rabbit)
thank you so much again payton!!! i love your reviews, and they mean a lot. You're so right again in your interpretations; this is kind of a post-apocalyptic scenario, the ...
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Re: when i ate the mold - IV (or, the rabbit)
thank you for your kind words and review! I deliberately chose not to capitalise the i to symbolise that in this sort of post-apocalyptic scenario he is not important anymore, ...
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Re: when i ate the mold - III
wow thank you so much payton!! you always nail it with your interpretations!! it feels amazing to be seen through my work, if that makes sense. i must read some ...
Mar 6, 2025 -
Re: when i ate the mold - IV (or, the rabbit)
awww thank you!! i'm not sure how clear the connections between all the poems are
Mar 5, 2025 -
Re: when i ate the mold - II
thank you so much for your lovely review! you're so kind, and i love your interpretations, you really got the vibe i was going for which i worried people might ...
Mar 4, 2025
