DomTheDumb

Well, that was very cute! It captures teenage awkwardness so well, and there's something so tactile about the writing style... the interruptions, the inner monologue, the book descriptions; it all ...

Hello, Velvet! I'm back for another review. As you may remember, I've randomly popped in to read Mercy and I don't really know what's going on and I don't really ...

Hello, Svshimi! Welcome to YWS :) First impressions: The chapter does two things at once and it handles both of them well. It introduces us to the MC's inner monologue ...

Hello, hello. Time to review! And this time, I'm just going to answer your questions lolol 1) What was your initial reaction to the chapter? I really liked Kei's inner ...

I've been looking for a poem to review, and yours it was! Now, I'm not the most at ease with reading or understanding poetry but that's part of the reason ...

'tis 'bout time (I have made the inexplicable decision to skip the prologue... idk why, I just wanted to start with ch.1; is this a bad idea lmao?) Anyway, it's ...

Note: Just remember... you said harsh. Dw though, all my reviews are constructive and I'm not being a dickhead just to be a dickhead! Now, lemme read. First Impressions: This ...

The usual disclaimer: I am NOT a fan of this kind of YA. Usually, I do not read stuff like this even to review. So the fact that I did ...

Hello! Apparently this is a fanfic so I won't comment on the characters or story; idk what this is a fanfic of (is it a horror version of Jack and ...

I loved this chapter! Aubrey is a very interesting character, and Lottie seems so sweet. I also don't think this chapter needs any real "action" as you mentioned in your ...

Immediate first impressions: very didactic, very Socratic. That is a high compliment. There is little to no fault in a technical sense in this poem and the imagery it conjures ...

Hello, Lavvie! This is a very intriguing opening chapter indeed; very moody, very interior, and does an excellent job of setting up the characters (both Mae and her family). From ...

Hello! I've read through the whole thing, and I have some thoughts. First impressions: This is an engaging opening, and it has the makings of a promising YA fic. The ...

I read through the whole piece, and the story is pretty strong. No recommendations there. The main, in fact, the glaring issue is the prose. The piece is waayyyy too ...

This is, technically, a damn near perfect chapter. There are a few niggles here and there (how can anyone "ask briskly"? That's like saying "he took a condescending walk in ...