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Re: take 2 of my novel
hii there, welcome to YWS! Let's hop in Ajay stirred on the cold marble floor, his joints aching and his head throbbing from the smell. you mention the pain Ajay ...
Oct 23 -
Re: The Moon Prince
hi there, here to review as promised :) I assume this is the chapter you were referring to. . It felt as if when my spirit duller, as did the ...
Oct 22 -
Re: Prior context not needed, looking for harsh insightful reviews
hiii WP! here as requested! he door creaks open with a mourning wai I don't think you need mourning. There isn't really another type of wail. Nearly cruel to see ...
Oct 22 -
Re: Blue
hiii happy review day from Team Butterflies/ Let's get into it on this lovely autumn day that feels fitting for this type of poetry. You say he will Is that ...
Sep 26 -
Re: Tar
Hi Connor, and welcome to yws! I hope this place treats you as well as it had me :> I tend to review by going chronologically and then leaving some ...
Aug 28 -
Re: The Dragon's Vale (Chapter 2) - WIP Novella (won't be updated for a while)
Hi Dom, back for the the last chapter here in the Green Room. They are old, Tauth thought, as he removed his pack from the horse’s back, and so they ...
Aug 28 -
Re: The Dragon's Vale (Chapter 1) - WIP Novella; won't be updated for a while)
Hi Dom. figured id still review these next few works so that whenever you do come back you have some feedback to take in. #teamtortoise He wore broken armour, on ...
Aug 27 -
Re: The Dragon's Vale (Prologue) - WIP Novella; won't be updated for a while)
hi Dom. Happy Tuesday and let's jump right in because it's past my bedtime. sat nestled a small village. Sat nestled is a bit redundant. Nestled is quite evocative of ...
Aug 26 -
Re: Luna’s story-Zombies of Mariesville
hi creepy. Been a while since I stopped by, but your description caught my eye. when she came along… ooo. This was creepily effective. That was what she said, anyway. ...
Aug 25 -
Re: Dear Mother
hi. Your title and description caught my eye, so happy Sinday Morning from Team Tortoise. But you cant walk in and hide from the things you did, it messed me ...
Aug 23 -
Re: The Studio {Chapter Two}
yay another chapter. Maybe i got it in time before it disappears feom the Green Room this time. Her eyes are already open, staring at the ceiling, waiting for the ...
Aug 22 -
Re: The Portrait.
hi pinto, happy thursday. The deacription of your short story caught my eyes. Let's jump in. I found myself catapulted, perched against the crimson tapestries carpeting an art gallery, unchanged ...
Aug 21 -
Re: Chapter Two - Unnamed LMS VII Novel
here we go one last time, finally getting some Green Room glitter xD woman of fifty greeted him in her mother tongue. Wouldn't it be THEIR mother tongue? They are ...
Aug 20 -
Re: Chapter One - Unnamed LMS VII Novel
hi. I've decided to brave a second and third installment tonight xD so let's get in to it. Eduard watched as the lone cattle climbed the narrow ramp to the ...
Aug 20 -
Re: Prologue - Unnamed LMS VII Novel
hiii. Figured id start from the beginning as it's a very good place to start His younger sister’s footsteps fell heavily on the staircase behind him. Water, tinted brown by ...
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