Stardust7827

I find your descriptions to be really relatable and well written, especially the opening few stanzas. The repetition of “not enough” helps to emphasize it, and I feel like it’s ...

“In this toxic era, love is loud—
a fleeting flame, a fickle crowd.” This first line reflects on performative love, where two people are only together for the novelty and excitement, ...

I like how relatable this poem is. The first two stanzas are great, with how the lengths of the lines and the rhythm are. They establish a mood and flow ...

The impact of this is beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this and I don’t think I have any criticisms of this. The short anecdote in the middle, about the man ...

I adore your writing style! Firstly, I noticed the “a week after that day” a “month before that day”, and in addition to finding this really helpful to identifying the ...

I really really like how you build up the story, beginning with Gavin’s cyclical and self-punishing thoughts. Gavin’s thoughts seem to be heavily centered around Alex, and his messy room ...

I love the imagery with color! The color associations with green, red and gray are really interesting. Green could imply rightness and safety, or a generally positive meaning, while red ...