i am a man,
and in the tradition of many,
I am the villain.
In the logic of religion,
I am the first,
the echo of a god,
the center that pulls all.
From thy ribs came many.
i am a man,
An emissary of rift,
a divider of worlds.
I am a solution to some,
a problem to many.
I give
and I take—
a spark of hope,
a shadow in its wake.
i am a man,
Deemed the strongest.
I cannot vent,
cannot complain;
weakness is a scarlet letter.
So I swallow my words at crowded tables,
fold my doubts into silence,
call it composure.
i am named egoic—
one who looks from above,
never from beneath.
And it makes me wonder—
What am I?
i am a living contradiction,
void of satisfaction,
born a god in story,
raised a man in expectation,
carrying both the crown
and the shadow it casts.
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I read this with the same wonder that I read Norse mythology with. I was going to elaborate on some of my favorite lines, but I can't choose between them. You take something so basic--"Man"-- and paint layers upon layers of story and possibility. It's beautiful.
I'm glad it got you like that, I'll try and post more of my work once I gather confidence. Thanks 🫶
That is a beautiful poem
Written by you
I believe that you were born
To be a poet
Don't forget
You are never alone
Because God is watching you
Also you should be thankful
For the things you have
A roof over your head
A bed to sleep
Clean water to drink
Some nice clothes to wear
Thank you for the kind words, those basics things are what keeps me going.
And I know that am not alone.