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Nice switch that Jon doesn't end up rescheduling his meeting. Hmm, I suppose this would make alot more sense had I read "Ch" (yeah, don't know how to spell it...) I also liked how their emotions were presented: so that the reader isn't told exactly (such as when they can't tell the difference between tears and rain), but can obviously infer. Duh, Amelia, that would be the point
-sigh- So even though I have little clue as to what's going on, I probably will end up reading the rest. Oh well.
-Amelia
I too, am uber fucking confused. I didn't even know the two were related, Ch and Pro that is. Caught me off guard.
But whatever, this in particular I thought, was excellently done.
oh man... now I want to go read ALL of ch.....
I'll wait till it's published, shall I?
Well, I'm gonna keep reading anyway...
I'm sooooo confused! Apparently i need to read Ch first!
Kyle and Ariel?! Omg that REALLY caught me off guard. Somehow I think that I shouldn't be reading this until I finish Ch. but of course I'll read it anyways since my favorite characters ever are in it and... they still care about each other at least from what I got. lol
This is wonderful, I like all the twists you've put in it so far. And Jon in Texas? Away from Kyle...Oh no! I hope he doesn't do it but even if he does I'm certain you'll make it a great transition, I'm always happy as to what directions you take!
Keep at it!
~Rieda
throat.
I don't care how you present it, I still can't believe wild guy Kyle could be getting married. He doesn't give off a married vibe. But what ever.