Because - Chap. 15

by KJ

Published November 24, 2008

In Because

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Merry_Haven
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Merry_Haven wrote a review Review · Jan 26, 2009

*KJ~

Okay, this chapter really made me smile. It's was really cute. And I absolutely loved the ending. The whole I have super powers too thing was funny. Oh, and you made me laugh, too! Thanks.

Oh, I have to ask. Who's Serena? Was she introduced in the earlier chapters? And I have this really odd feeling that something bad might happen.

Otherwise, I have nothing else to say besides wanting to get to 16. And you know how in our conversations, I told you I'll just do 5 chapters per day? I'm not. I'll review as much as I can until my hands hurt from typing. And that's not your fault.

Great job!

*Merry

LOLLIPOPGIRL030 wrote a review Review · Nov 28, 2008

Gah, I loved this chapter! Like everyone else, I loved, "Watch out. I've got super powers too.'' :D It was real cute and kinda flirty for your character, which is unexpected, but I liked it. Serena, huh? Hope she doesn't pose a problem.:D haha
If you dont get this published, I'll will kill you!! Can't wait for the next chapter. Have a good Thanksgiving!

~~Nikki

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Sheik
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Sheik wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2008

“Oh, Vick?” I smiled again.

“Yeah?”

“I have super powers, too. Watch out.”


Heh, that made me laugh. :)

Vick is such a complete guy. Some lady authors tend to make their men a little too girly, if you know what I mean. You don't, that's very good, I think. You're doing an excellent job developing his personality too. He does remind me a little of Mr. Sheldon. :lol:

I liked this chapter and I'm sad that I'm all done for now. :(

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Anna Graham
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Anna Graham wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2008

*Applause* I loved this chapter! You're great at creative dialogue, and you manage to keep it realistic, too!
Vick is my hero! He's got so much character; you are a magician!

She stood there as I pressed it to my ear, and I gave her a look.
I played with my lower lip.

Little things like this make a story so realistic! Everyone else seems to forget to mention the little quirks people have, making them human. But not you! Well done!

Love it more!
--Anna

Angel of Death wrote a review Review · Nov 24, 2008

Ah, this was a very sweet chapter. I love Vick! There wasn't any jump-out problems that I saw, but I'm just sad that I have to wait till after the holidays for the next chapter. Have a nice holiday though! I'm going to use my vaycay to write but anyways...back to the story. An adorable chapter and a very entertaining story. I can't wait to read more and keep up the good work.

Ta for now,

~Angel

In_the_Moonlight wrote a review Review · Nov 24, 2008

That was so adorable. I was laughing so hard when he talked about his adventure of the day. Vick really does seem like a good guy for Becca but then I heard the name 'Serena'. I hope Vick's not the player type, but I don't think he'd do that to Becca. I bet with Vick helping her along Becca will face the demons in her closet and get her poetry mojo back. AWWWWWW..... :oops: sorry I still just think they make the cutest couple.

“I have super powers, too. Watch out.”


I'm loving this story. Can't wait till after thanksgiving to read the rest.

-Moony :D



Poetry is thoughts that breathe, and words that burn.
— Thomas Gray