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Magnolia Man
In my lukewarm skin, I long for
The dewiness of your well of words.
Few and far between
They freckle me
And bloom ‘neath the heartbeat of my flesh.
My bucket’s all but drenched
I fly it down to you
And back up it goes!
I see your kisses on the worn wood
You’ve smoothed off the moss, the fuzz of my fear
And slicked it with the flecks
Of your sunflower soul.
If I were elastic you’d be on me
Blue and Hazel, kissing noses
Whispering and teething.
A flare of sun brushing the Earth
There is a path in this rainbow
This meadow stretches past the horizon
And creeps into the stars
I’ll see you there
And tangle into your points
Feed me your flowers, Magnolia Man
I’ll chew and sprout newness from my tongue.
Ooohhhh the colors in a green visualizing flowers within a meadow, that is so wonderful!!! + i absolutely love the (assonance) rhyme stretching from the beginning (dewiness) to the end (newness), it makes the assonance much more impactful. I'm in awe of the creativity here!
Thank you Lala!! <3 <3