HAM
"i would kill to look like you"
i stuff my bloody hands into my pockets
trying to forget her face as she laid there
lifeless and pale
"what i would give to look like you"
i laugh and smile absently
begging my lungs to fill the empty space
where my heart used to throb
"your body is what i pray for"
i shift, knees sore
from kneeling late at night
wishing that the numbers on the scale were wrong
"you look totally to die for"
i nod along
running my fingers along the worn edges of her photo
"are you even real"
i stare into my melting reflection
transparent and ever changing
-i've sold my soul to mean something to the stars
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I love this so much, the meaning of literally "killing" to look like (you).
giving your organs to look like (you)
the rhyme scheme on "pray for" and "sore"
The hidden meanings in each stanza are made to convey a new tone.
My only suggestion is IF you want a poem with deeper meaning, using metaphors for each meaning, like for example:
"bending and shifting, like the autumn leaves trying to change to be winter.
to be, winter.