They ask the most of her, but drift farther and farther away when she calls to them.
The door they hide behind allows their slashes to cut into her while shielding them from the consequences of those wounds.
What will they do when they realize this division, this door, is no stronger than delicate morning fog, the product of long blurred eyes?
When will they see that they are still children living in their mother's home?
This time,
when she knocks on the door,
will you listen?
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
This poem is like humans treat earth has mother takes from it but when she need something we put distance. And don't care about her properly.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
Maybe you could make a few lines a little easier to understand, especially the part about the door and the morning fog. I had to read those lines again to understand what they meant.
Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I like the message in this poem and its good my favorite line is
This ending makes me smile you know
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall its good poem. Keep writing!! Thank you for sharing.