It hurts,
When I cried loudly in silence,
Pressing my mouth with my hands.
When I left scars on my own body,
Just because I don't know how to explain the pain.
When I felt left out,
Even surrounded by the people I love.
When I hid my tears under a painful smile,
Knowing you'll hurt me more.
When I sit for hours in my room,
Not knowing that I haven't eaten yet.
When I didn't answer your questions,
Knowing I will cry while answering.
I said it's fine to my soul.
But,
Deep down,
I almost said that "It hurts".
~Letters by yona ~
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Yona, the way you described this feeling of hurt and suffering in silence was painful. I can almost imagine it so vividly and the emotions were something I could've never felt better than the piece you wrote.
This line especially was painful because even after all the break down, hurt, cries and anxieties we went through; we still manage to say that we're fine to avoid any unwelcoming or attention to what we're truly feeling. But sometimes, even though letting it all out feels ok, talking to someone close and trusted feels ok too. Even if you don't have someone to talk to, we often find sharing our pain and hurt to a stranger anonymously or talking to ourselves helps a lot too.
I love the way you articulate pain into this beautiful poetry you've written. You have an amazing talent!
NB: Spring always comes after winter. Rainbows always comes after rain. So why can't we rise after our darkest moments?🫶
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Am idiot and fool moon living on earth ok cuz i can't watch ocean rejecting my love. Yay~
Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Firstly it was goome!!( means awesome i invented thsi word don't mind am crazy )this poem is like saying how we hide pain behind smile saying am fine. And the crying in dark, and its truly hurts dear. Its so relatable.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
I have no suggestions. It felt like am reading someones private paggok page ( it is also my new word for diary )
Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I like the whole poem btw my favorite part is the end... It hurts.... My favorite line maybe
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
It was good. Easy to read and understand. Keep writing!!! Thank you for sharing. Yay~
Am crying too