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Re: Laughing Jill makes her dramatic entrance!
I like the dramatic entrance of Laughing Jill. It's a cool idea that Abby as a scare actor wants to bring this scary aspect into the show, and that Jill ...
Oct 15 -
Re: My beautiful memories
This poem is sad and nostalgic. It feels restrained and quiet. I like the metaphor of the mask, especially the part where the mask becomes so convincing that everyone believes ...
Oct 9 -
Re: Keeper of the lost cities. What would happen if Sophie was the neverseen’s moonlark?
this was a fun chapter but I am confused a bit because I don't know what happened before and it does feel like a chapter already a part way through ...
Sep 28 -
Re: WoS Ch16 - Rock Bottom
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter? It was a change from the previous chapter, with less fight and more about what power can cost 2) What were your ...
Sep 26 -
Re: WoS Ch15 Part 2: Consequences
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter? I do not know Digimon and have not read your story before. It seemed to be an intense chapter that escalates quickly ...
Sep 26 -
Re: At Red’s garage! (Kyle’s POV)
Poor Kyle. He seems like a nice boy, yet his friend doesn't care that he is feeling uncomfortable, and his parents have taken his video games. I think the parents ...
Sep 26 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Three: The Farm
Rev was an edgy but cool character and I liked his dialogue as it brought some humour. The meeting introduces us to the rest of the cast in person, and ...
Sep 26 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Two: The Hospital
Here we go to another point of view elsewhere in the adultless word. Using multiple narrators is a good choice for a Young Adult genre since it keeps pacing dynamic ...
Sep 26 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm
I see there is already many reviews on the chapter, and I don't want to go over on the same points as them. Kurt is a compelling protagonist for me, ...
Sep 26 -
Re: The road will stretch on
I enjoy the imagery you use in this poem. It evokes a very strong image in my head. I have heard of marble hornets and seen clips, but not watched ...
Sep 21 -
Re: .
Cal finally tells Alex what happened and he could have gone into more detail with everything that has just happened and how long it has been dragged out for poor ...
Sep 16 -
Re: .
This is the shortest chapter yet. I think it might well have come at the end of chapter 10. They are really dragging this out, but I do understand why. ...
Sep 13 -
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Does a highlighter click? I have not used one that has a clicking mechanism like a pen does, but that might just be me not being cool enough with my ...
Sep 13 -
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The sensory detail at the beginning is nice with the lights. It helps me visualise the scene more. Poor Lucy just wants to do the project, and I am not ...
Sep 13 -
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It was not nice of Cal to blame Lucy for the panic attack, since he knows the real reason why. Lucy seems a bit of a third wheel. I wonder ...
Sep 13
