Come, take my hand and guide me through
To where this road shall lead me to
Stop at every turn; show the North Star
Present for all who turn anew
Sway my face to east and west; north and south
Let it display life and death; a smile and frown
See staunch philosophy in the barking dog
Witness the marvel of life in this mundane town
Tell me, when and where these roads diverge
And where they then meet; joined like a herd
Show me this lovely web; a spider's fantasy
How all in this mystical choir are heard.
Show me the spectacle of life so that I may
Witness what it means to be human for a day
And in the future meet another young spirit
To pass this blaze anew one day.
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this is really beautiful! I love how the different parts of the journey are described throughout the poem. The first few lines are really good and flow nicely together. I love how it shows that everyday things can teach us stuff, like how philosophy can be heard from the barking dog. I like the line about the web too, a spiders fantasy. And the ending is cool in how the narrator wants to know what it means to be human, so they can pass on what they've learned to another young spirit all the things they've learned on their journey
Bravo
You did a fine job writing your poem
I believe that you were born to be
A poet
That is the gift that our Father
Gave to you
Don't you waste that gift
You need to use that gift every day
Also you should be proud of the things you
Achieved every day
You should not worry about what other's think of you
You should try hard to be yourself
Oh my god thank you so much!!!! >.< I appreciate it a lot!!