Sometimes I have these weird thoughts in my head, even when I try get them to leave.
They always come back though, every day. Usually they don't leave for months.
I wonder if anyone else has these thoughts.
No one I know seems to.
They just say it's part of growing up or that I'm just being grumpy or moody.
Little did they know it's much, much, much more than that.
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Thoughts. . .
My curiosity is growing. . .
I think all of the time.
And yet again, I think so little.
Because I to. . .
have weird thoughts. . .
though I doubt they're similar.
But I wonder what these thoughts are. Whether they are similar or different.
Sometimes the thoughts haunt me. Never leaving. That is what made this poem feel so real.
This is me. I think like this every day. Every second. The pain growing inside because I feel crazy. And maybe I'm not alone. Just like you.
This felt like me.
And I know deeply just like you (the narrator).
This is by far one of my favorite poems by you, and I'd like to read more of your work.
~ Jaye.
awww tysm!! I think we may have similar thoughts - if we do I hope urs can go and get better!!
Awwww firstly lemme say you are not alone or just "moody" for having thoughts and I hope you're ok.
Now onto the poem, it's really amazing. It's often said that when someone can communicate a feeling or thought with less words but can keep the meaning as if having a lot of words it's amazing. That's exactly what you captured. You got across the perfect feeling within this poem.
My favorite line is "They just say it's part of growing up or that I'm just being grumpy or moody," the flow is great, the words provoke emotion.
Seriously amazing work and I hope you're ok :>
Aww thank you sm!! I am okay atm I hope u are too!!
Elo ββ I read this yesterday and I didn't review because I fell asleep. Today, I'm back here to review.
It feels like a paragraph I'd so find in the book "The diary of a wimpy kid" ‘‘‘
I get these thoughts too, I feel that it defines who you are even if their value in the standards are barely present.
Letz think together across borders, fellow thinker πͺΏ
Your profile picture makes you look like such a sweetheart, btw.
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It is really relatable, fr--ienddd π§
Have great thoughts, I hope they stay close to you. I hope you have a good day/nightΒ‘
Keep writing, byee-byee
Aww tysm u seem rly rly nice and I hope u have a great day/night too!!!
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ooooooo! Okay, so I really liked this because anyone can relate to it. After all, it doesn't say what type of thoughts they are.
However, I think you could improve your prose and make the poem flow better so that, if read aloud, it rolls off the tongue. That might mean finding synonyms for words or rewriting whole lines.
I understand this so much. I have something I like to call "self-diagnosed chronic loneliness". I could be in a room full of friends and family and still feel alone. And none of my friends understand how I can feel this way.
Aww thank you sm!!
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This poem really felt good to me.I think this poem is about having thoughts that keep coming back, even when someone tries to get rid of them. The writer seems to feel misunderstood because the people around them think it's just moodiness or a normal part of growing up, while they know it's something more serious. I also noticed how the writer wonders if anyone else experiences the same thing, which makes me think they might feel alone with these thoughts.and here i am even i feel same.
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This poem feel like a thoughts of an alone and lonely person.so my favorite line is
coz ik how it feels when no one understand us.
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It was good poem. Keep writing! Thank you for sharing.
Thank you sm!!
Yw