You would “miss” me.
Sure you would.
You didn’t miss me when you never texted me first.
You didn’t miss me when you were at home.
You didn’t miss me when you were talking to your best friend.
You didn’t miss me when I had to go with other friends because you left me.
So no, you really wouldn’t miss me.
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Hi Rennnnn!
I love this poem so much, and I could relate to it a lot!
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I love the word miss that comes in every line; I'm not sure why... but I LOVE IT
This reminds me of my ex-best friend because this is how I felt as well. She started hanging out with other friends, and she ignored me all the time. I've forgiven her, but we are not friends anymore..
Which is sad, but well , things change and we have to move on right?
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Personally, more detail please tbh!
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How did she treat you
What did she do to you
How did you feel?
Overall, amazing poem!
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Hello... I think this is quite a good poem. The word 'miss' actually plays a double role here for me. It can mean missing someone because they are no longer around, or it can also mean failing to notice someone while they are still around. Is this what you are trying to imply here? The person fails to notice your absence while you were there, so now you believe that they wouldn't really miss you when you are no longer around for them.
yea nd thx
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Its actually beautiful. I think this poem is about someone who feels neglected by a friend. The friend claims they would miss the writer, but their actions don't show it.
The writer remembers all the times the friend didn't text first, didn't spend time with them, or left them alone to be with other people.i can understand this coz even am that kind of friend who wait for other to treat me like i do but they never..
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I love the whole thing. And my favorite line is
i know how it feels they have some other best friend yet they say you are my bestie etc.
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Overall i like it. Keep writing!! Thank you for sharing. Yay~
tysm!!!
Ok its good
I really like this poem and i think its great!
Ehhkk!!! tysm!!