Why did you make him complete?
Why complete him?
He has no use for a face
He has no need for a body
He doesn't need eyes
That will only see suffering.
He doesn't need hands
That will only be bound.
Why did you finish him?
Why make him whole?
He has no use for a heart
That will only hurt more.
He has no need for bones
That will only break
Why would you keep him intact?
He has no need for thoughts
That will only hate
He has no use for emotions
That will only give him pain.
Why did you make him complete?
Why keep him whole?
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This poem reads as an existential protest against the conditions of human existence. Rather than simply questioning the meaning of life, You challenge the wisdom of creation itself, presenting every human faculty as another avenue for suffering. The eyes witness pain, the hands experience helplessness, the heart accommodates sorrow, and the mind becomes a source of torment. Through repetition and anatomical imagery, the poem builds an indictment against existence, questioning whether completeness is truly a blessing when suffering is inseparable from being human. Ultimately, it is a haunting reflection on the paradox of being made whole in a world that continually finds ways to break us.
This was written over an existential crisis I had over doodling a wolf, by the way.
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All artists are insane. It's one of the perks of the job
Lol I love your responses, AJ