Who’s out there that can help me?
The birds?
No.
The trees?
No.
The cats?
No.
The stars?
No.
Am I alone in this world?
I hear the chirps as they fly above me,
I listen to the swaying of their branches,
Their soft meows and purrs as they rub against me
Watching them twinkle and sparkle in the sky
Who’s out there that can help me?
My friends?
No.
My parents?
No.
My sisters?
No.
Myself?
No.
Am I even real in this world?
I smile and laugh watching them with ‘joy’
I nod my head and obey their commands
I chuckle and watch them twirl around
I stare in the mirror finding only shatters
And the question that haunts me night and day is. . .
Who’s out there that can help me?
and
Am I even real?
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Am moon!!! Thank you for this read btw * mwah!* i really like this poem so much
Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Firstly i love the rhythm here and the repetition is so powerful here. I think this poem is about a speaker saying they are happy outside but inside just broken, they question that if anyone truly know them.and also i think that they feel alone and lonely even surrounded by others.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
I don't have any suggestions but i felt like this line
could be changed to "I listen to their branches sway" for a smoother rhythm.but its my thoughts ok.
Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I liked the whole thing the repetition and simple words choice all if i could rate this out of 10 i would easily give 9 i swear. Its so relatable dude. My favorite line is
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall its easy to read and understand. Keep writing!! Thank you for sharing my friend!!! Yay~ don't forget am here your 🌕