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Ooh this is rly cool!!
My favourite part is the line “Just where my heart lies it melts into sheer red” that
part rly hits hard idk why but yea
uhmm can I ask what it is about? I’m not very good at reading between the lines sorry!! I really, really love this though ur writing is so amazing!!!! I hope u keep writing!!!
Thank you, I'm very glad that you liked it ^_^
It is about unspoken thoughts. As the two characters Haini and Star meets, the stanzas are their internal monologues which they wish to tell the other person. Stanza 2,3,4,6,7 and 8 are Haini to Star. Stanza 1, 5,9 and 10 are Star to Haini. It's operating few minutes before Star leave the city forever as her bus arrive.