Regret opened a museum with only one exhibit per room.
In the first hung the sentence you swallowed at the train station,
lit softly, framed in the good wood.
Visitors stood before it the way you stand before the sea.
In the second room, the road not taken had been paved anyway.
It ran along the wall, smooth and shining,
and if you pressed your ear to it
you could hear a version of you laughing at a dinner you never attended.
The guide was a small, patient ghost of almost.
"Don't touch the glass," it said, "though everyone does."
At the gift shop they sold tickets to the past
priced exactly at the cost of one more day.
I left through the exit marked Now.
Outside it was raining, ordinary, unfinished,
and the rain, which had no exhibits, fell on everything
without asking what any of it might have been.
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Maybe regret isn't a place we’re meant to stay in. Maybe the hardest part is realizing that Now is the only room we can actually walk into.♡
Hira - that is absolutely beautiful - I'm a professional narrator and could hear that in my head as I read it.
“you could hear a version of you laughing at a dinner you never attended.”
That is such a powerful image of the path you never took.
Hi hira! Its moon!
I really liked this one! The whole idea of regret being turned into a museum is honestly so creative. Every room felt like a different kind of regret, and the details made it easy to imagine everything. The part about hearing another version of yourself laughing at a dinner you never attended was probably my favorite, it’s such a strange but beautiful thought. And that ending with the rain felt really quiet and emotional. Overall, this was really thoughtful and beautifully written.
yaho hiraaa!!! review timeeee
I like this, it kinda goes with the whole "If _______ jumped off a bridge, would you do it too?"
Even though everyone's doing it, that doesn't make it correct or right.
The whole premise of the poem is interesting to me, it's a very abstract idea that you can really play around with. I enjoyed it.
I really love this line. The rain doesn't ask for permission, it just does what it does.
Anyway, I have honors geo that I have to pay attention in, so this is all
~ yuuki the dinosoor
hehe thank youu :3 glad the rain and the suspicious ghost guide made sense to you XD
:)