I heard that people see everything the way they see the ones they love,
so I realized I am selfish,
because I separate pomegranate seeds from their pith.
Am I in love?
I feel the clock was always meant to be with the wall.
Am I in love?
I feel the clouds love the moon more than anything else.
Am I in love?
I realized, in the end, that I am not in love,
because I have no one to love,
and no one who loves me.
Maybe I am simply kind,
born with a quiet soul,
wishing for everything to be loved
except me.
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Are we the same person? I relate to your poetry so much that it actually scares me.
Your writing is so beautiful, and it makes me feel less alone in the world, so I guess this review is more of a thank you for being so relatable.
I have all this love in my heart but no one to give it to. No one really looks at me romantically. Never once has a boy come up to me on his own and asked me out; I've always been the one to ask the boy out. I guess if you want the job done right, you gotta do it yourself.
This line puzzled me; I'm not sure what it means, but the first thing I thought of was Hades and Persephone.
Thank you. Actually that line means i separted seeds from its bitter pith so i can have only sweet seed but seeds and pith are meant to be together and i separted..like that
Hey! I like how the poem takes up the question posed by the title and returns to it several times, each time expanding on the various ways to perceive love differently.
The speaker takes the premise of seeing the world the way one sees the beloved and applies it to themselves jestingly. The initial premise states that a person thinks about normal things the same way as they think about their lovers. Furthermore, the speaker speculates whether the way they perceived ordinary things meant that they were selfish.
This line shows a level of simplicity and attachment to objects that the speaker sees around them. The objects mentioned in the poem the clock and the wall are the most common things in the world. By stating that they always belonged together, the speaker begins to find relationships between every other object in the world. The clouds and the moon keep the speaker company.
By applying the initial premise to their life, the speaker discovers that they do not seem to feel love for any person or thing in their life. They see themselves as not receiving or spreading love in their life.
I think this line wraps everything up nicely in that it reiterates the main ideas of the poem in a single breath. The speaker has wished that every object and person around them could feel and experience love. I think this is a beautiful turn of phrase that provides a more expansive look at the meaning of the poem.
In general, I think the poem is concise and thought-provoking. I enjoyed reading about how the speaker perceived their world and the realizations that led them to understand their emotions. The question that is asked throughout the poem kept me engaged and made me want to find the answer along with the speaker.
Lovely work!<3
~hira♡
Thank you..
Hey hey! Yuuki is here for a quick review. So it's considerably short, which I honestly see a lot in poetry, but you tend to get a deep meaning despite the length. I appreciate the repetition of the phrase "am I in love?" it kind of reminds me of the song, "am I in love now, I don't know." so I heard it while I was reading this. I feel like the end was a little empty, it didn't really feel like a closing statement but more of a stanza in itself, like it belongs somewhere in the middle of the poem. Obviously, this is just my opinion, and I overall liked this quite a bit. Thank you for the pleasure of reading this!
~ Kiki :P
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Aww, what a beautiful piece describing that confusing feeling we all get when we fall in love. I mean, are we really selfish for loving them? Or are they the selfish ones for making us fall for them without any warning signs? No caution, just one blink, and you will find yourself spiraling in some confusing thoughts our brains formulate. But despite this all that we want to do is fall in love and be loved the way we deserve to be loved too. Nice work!!
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