I will mix your blood and saliva and drink them just to quench my thirst.
I will press my tongue on your chapped and weeping lips until you say you want me.
I will lick your sweet sweat until it stings my lungs.
I will nibble your neck until it hurts and turns crimson.
I will gash your throat, if you don't say my name.
I will scald your fingers with my boiling love, if you forbid my touch.
I will wring your delicate eyes, if you gaze at anything except me.
I will crush your heart until it breaks into pieces, if you refuse to choose me.
I will be your blurry shadow, following you even through the darkest nights. But if you refuse to follow my lead, I will break your leg bones and never let walk away.
Darling, don't be afraid. I won't hurt you,
but if you don't love me back, then I think I have no choice...
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Um.... dang moon....
Never knew that you had it in you......
Just the title "Baby don't be afraid of me" yet here you are giving him threats....XD
ANYWAYS onto the review.
This was a decent poem! I think just because it was a little obsessive and creepy in a way, it kind of made me feel odd. Mostly just becasue I'm not the kind of person who'd threaten the guy I loved. I think it's just because I'm too shy and "people" plaesing to do that.
But at some point I do get how you feel with it. Just because you don't want the person you love to leave you for someone else. Like OUCH that would be horrible.
And at some point, I feel like it'd be horrible and I'd want to do something.... you know what I mean?
I feel like this seems weird, but I like the image you bring.
Keep up the good work!
Your BESTIE & FAVORITE READER (though I'm scread to read more....)
~ Jaye.
Ow. Don't be scared my dear bestie. Actually thats my other personality. And moon is not always cute and soft.. Heheh
WOAH POWER-MOVE MUCH!!! this is so like obsession, im sorry, like SOOOO like obsession, you know? Its really good, I love how you integrated Love and violence, because sometimes their is such a fine line between the two. my favorite line was
WOAH i love how the speaker talks about their love like the love is very innocent, im getting that! You've done some absolutely stunning work. You show review my poems, Blue Jay, and Miss Scarlett Fair!!!
Wow, this poem was heavy. The way you described the need/want of being loved by a certain person was overwhelming and harsh. It's like knowing you are ruined and needing control, but still you need to be loved. I really liked the line,
It kinda feels like "I want to be the one to ruin you, if I can't no one else can" and very controlling. This was a really good poem, a little vague, but nonetheless, wonderful. Keep writing my friend, good job!!!